idont think thats very yorkeish. if yure thinkin of traks like palo alto, idont think so.

I was thinking Fitter, Happier...

I do listen to Radiohead, and argh, you're right it is alot like fitter,happier. well, I might as well trash it, I don't want to have things that resemble it that much.

re chrisarclark: i really like ur lyrics, exceptance is so real and able to connect with. u mustv worked for ages on the rhyming!
re efunk: ur style is cool.. u have more???

well... my go i guess

she runs down the street but no-one sees her
she screams in terror but no-one hears her
she kills everone in sight but no-one feels her
but that is why she's there

no-one ever listened
no-one bothered looking
no-one cared to touch
no-one cared at all

alone in the world she screams
while the ghosts of lives float by
each in thier own little world
with their pathetic lies
of false trust, mistaken love, broken promises and tempting lust
but still she runs
as the ghosts close in
not seeing, hearing or touching a thing

no-one listened to them
everyone was blind to look
and she is just a ghost like them
trying to fight a way out

just once could she take flight
break free and breathe the air
leave behind the confusion and never have to care

hummm... i'd be interested on anyone's thoughts, i wrote this years ago, and it depresses the hell outta me!

not really. doesnt take me that long normally. ithink that one came in parts overtime- started as somethin else which ihad scraped and then later isaved it from the trash by puttin a new spin to some of the words. when it comes it juste comes and it probably took a few minutes.

I really liked it Average, I just think it needed a little tweaking. Try turning it into more of a song format because there are some really nice ideas in there. Please don't scrap it!

I wrote this little ditty last night with Aaron, the tune is really dark but I'm not 100% sure on the lyrics yet. Let me know what you think.

Killer

It's enough to let me know,
You're going to go and throw away those clothes,
From that day,
Aren't you?
Darling?

Everybody meet Emily,
She's a real killer,
Like the ones from the movies,
She'll blow you away,
She'll blow you away.

Let's everybody play that game,
It's a real killer,
Oh, ain't it such a shame,
Tongue down your throat,
Gun to your head,
She'll blow you away.

So take me out tonite,
I'm looking real killer,
High heeled princess with a deathwish,
And a head full of chemicals and dreams,
I'll blow myself away.

It's enough to let you know,
I'm going to go and throw away my phone,
In the river so you won't know where I am,
Will you?
Darling?

that is awesome, i agree depressing as hell, but still awesome. I really like the description of other people as ghosts.a great vent song!

my turn again!! havent got a chorus for this one yet but still tell me what u think

The Sun

Sun rise to a new day
I wonder as here I lay
How can something disappear into darkness
Then appear in a flash of brightness?

The sun reminds me of you
Lighting all faces around you
Keep glowing, warm the hearts of the lonely
For you are my one and my only

My beauty wont burn your eyes
For my fire burns inside
No don’t pity my shadow
Though if you don’t it makes you shallow

thanx for you comment, as for yours, i think the middle is really warming and happy. but it seems to end negative.. or maybe im missing the point. i think you should expand that middle part. altho i do like 'my beauty wont burn your eyes, for my fire burns inside'

i think me putting "for you are my one and only" kind of changes the mood of the song so im gonna change that.

im basically comparing myself and others to the sun

thanx twirler. here is the song completed its about a chick btw (arent they all)

Sun rise to a new day
I wonder as here I lay
How can something disappear into darkness
Then appear in a flash of brightness?

The sun reminds me of you
Lighting all faces around you
Keep glowing, warm the hearts of the lonely
Share those feeling you’ve shown me

The sun will burn those who linger

My beauty wont burn your eyes
For my fire burns inside
No don’t pity my shadow
Though if you don’t it makes you shallow

The sun will burn those who linger

I’m basking in your compliments
Getting burnt by your pity

The sun will burn those who linger



i guess the chorus ive come up with kinda explains it. ill try and explain the whole song. in the first verse its about how ive been feeling pretty crap since she broke up with me, 2nd verse is about how she was good to me in some ways. the chorus explains that even though the sun looks pretty it can be deadly, and it was the same with the chick. the third verse is how i didnt want people feeling sorry for me though if they didnt i thought they were being shallow, which doesnt really make sence, but meh. i think thats it. oh the bridge, i dunno, sounds cool and kinda fits