I'd just like to say something. We should alll try very hard not to use major elements of each others songs for or own. Although influence is unavoidable.

i agree with that.

What exactly were you referring to?

Just in general. I'm not saying full-force copying, I'm assuming that none of you would do that. I mean just not to create a song based on the same idea or using the same original phrases.

This isn't a song yet, just got a few lines down. Feedback, good or bad, is cool.

efunk, 2003

im a graceful law breaker
weaving crimes but never time
so kind my mind is to the maker
if im not careful fate is mine
im the thoughtful cocaine user
try and float above them all
but beggars cant be choosers
i question why i fly at all
ive got a mushroom for a brain
with spots and stripes of rainbow hue
not the source for all my pain
you say its wrong ill say **** you
can be a very clever thinker
but im not strong or tall at all
im a heavy drinker
yes and sometimes thats not all
an inquisitive predator
im too cunning and so strong
but still i just cant get at her
been trying for so long
sometimes i just dont care to win
i get high dont play at all
my love for her like heroin
i shoot her up and watch things fall
known to lay back and take a puff
it makes me think of love
guess i cant seem to get enough
her stare fits me like a glove
i will say this now i guess
it just cant be said again
words are not meant to impress
so all i need are drugs and women

I really like that one!!!

k ive posted this b4 but i worked on it more and made it into a full song:

New Years

New Year comes as the old one dies
New fears come as my old mind lies
Regret fills the air as the sky explodes
I feel sorrow inside as it grows
People cheer as I dare to dream
A future life that remains unseen
Will I ever be content with me?
Or is this how I’ll always be?

As the clock strikes 12 I bow my head
Will I fall or call for an end
Or will this New Year bring light instead.

A fresh start I promise myself
Good times, good friends and good health
No more rejection or heart brakes
No more tears of mine to form lakes
No good came out of this year
What will come next I do fear
Triumphs? Riches? Poverty?
Suffering most probably

As the clock strikes 12 I bow my head
Will I fall or call for an end
Or will this New Year bring light instead

As the clock strikes 12 I bow my head
Will I fall or call for an end
Or will this New Year bring life instead


and i second that bonnie. efunk has some real talent

I was high as hell writing that, but thanks. Your rhyme in the battle arena's pretty dope, Bonnie.

Drugs and women! I love it. Thats really good efunk, but I can't tell what style it is. It could be like a rap almost, but then the bottom part about the girl and love reminds me of The Strokes. Just kind of speaking the words, with guitar in the background.

Nice rhymes efunk, I have to agree that it's difficult working out what sort of song it would be. It's quite similar to massive attack style rhymes. Don't you just love getting high and writing stuff? I like the New Years one but I prefer the verses to the chorus.
Here's one of mine that has been strongly influenced by the past couple of weeks. It's called scrapbooks of sad memories and its taking ages to finish but heres what I got so far.

you look through scrapbooks, of those last looks, that you took at a house you used to hide in,
happy new year, kissing in the pouring rain,
honey things just ain't the same as they once were.
so play the soundtracks to their suicides,
broken train tracks, they won't take you anywhere,
and I admit I'm kinda scared by all of this.

stars are falling from your pockets from your empty heads,
i'm hiding underneath the bed.


On a final note, I wouldv'e thought that the rule against not copying each other would have been obvious. There is no way I would rip off someone elses stuff and I hope the same goes for anyone else who is going to bother posting on this thread.