I'm sorry, this probably isn't where this belongs, but I really have no idea where it does belong, so if it's moved, I understand fully. Anyways, about 5 months ago, I picked up a guitar for the first time and fell in love, and really sparked my musical interest. I haven't really written much, I only have 2 full songs (including this one), but neither is final as of yet. Anyways, I'm just looking to get as much feedback on my writing as possible. Whether you leave a single word comment, or a page of writing I won't care, I'll still appreciate it. I don't care if you think it's shit, I'd like to hear your opinion. Anyways....

I stand among a field of men
who have forgotten about the breeze
the gentle glow of the stars
and everything in between
They don't hear a quiet note
crying through the waves
of shallow persuasive faces
that keep me hidden away
They don't see the love
because they have lost their eyes
sold to the hollow ones
who promised them the sky
They are you
and I am me
and while you may not know who is who
I know there is no we
It began with a thought
and continued in a dream
all the haze became so clear
as I got lost in the trees
So take my hand
and let me lead you through the land
along the only path I've ever known
See what I see
look through the trees
just please don't let go