Hey give me some feedback on this song I wrote...
I wrote it for my gf a long time ago...we arnt together anymore but it still is one of my best songs I've wrote.

Im sitting here thinking of you once again
Thinking of all the good times since
Since we ended it all before
When I walked through the door
Everything has been so good
Im just so glad that I came back to you that night

I just hope we can stay together
I dont want this to ever end
I love you through all this bad weather
Please come here and take my hand

Chorus:I dont know what I would ever do without you(Repeat for a while)
(As the line above is repeating)
Please help me get through all the hard times
I need you here with me, here with me
I know we can make it through all the hard times
Just as long as you comfort me,comfort me

No matter how hard my day is
Just as long as I see your face smiling down at me
I can get through anything
You help me get through everything
You are my angel above
I will do anything for love
And I do, Love you
I do, Love you and only you
I will do anything for you
I will do anything for you
I will do anything for you
I will do anything for you
I will do anything for you
I will do anything for you

Thanks ahead of time for the imput...Im debating with my band right now whether the chorus should be the I dont know what Id do without you part or the part before it.
Let me know what you think.

Downtown_Broker

It's a cliche of a song. I see nothing really creative about it. It's just writing out a song no real thought put into your word choice or flow. If you are a highschool emo band. Go for it, i'm sure you have some fan base. If you aren't, then ditch the lyrics and put some effort into what you are saying. You'll be better off for it.

WOW....well thanks for the imput.

that's about as nice a reply as you are going to get.


seriously, no one cares about your lame love drama...find something else to write about or don't write at all.


oh my gooses