Here is a simple song I wrote some months ago. Nothing more special than any of my other songs, just shorter to type. And just a little poll, should I call this song "Dreams" or "Wake up!"?

Dreams

Dreams, dreams, dreams
Makes you believe in all hopes
Makes you pretend life is something diffeerent
But when you realise there is no hope
And no good awaits you
Dreams can make reality even worst than it is

Dreams, dreams, dreams
My only solution to feel better
My only link with happiness
Those thoughts are in fact painful
So painful I don't want to believe in anything
Dreams are just happy lies

Dreams, dreams, dreams
Can't you feel it's calling you just after disapointing you
Can't you feel it makes you sad while supposely making you happy
Actually, I keep asking myself why I'm still dreaming
Maybe I just like to hurt myself
Dreams, where would I be without them?

WAKE UP!

Silence is worst than being told that it completly sucks and that there is nothing good to do about it, it's pure crap. So go ahead and bash on my work, but don't stay quiet.

pure crap





hmm..
this seems very wordy, maybe too wordy to be a lyric, but thats for you to decide of course.

personally i didnt find it interesting at all..

yeah, but beorn, you lyrics are always very poetical, and a lyric doesn't need to be poetical. Well not all of them.

I want to read that with intonation and not really sing it. I don't know if you understand, because it's hard to explain (for me).

It's hard for me to find a rythem but that's just cuz it's a forum. I'm sure those words would fit into a song of some sort. I think it should be called Wake Up

Here is another one because I'm bored. Probably still too "wordy" for Beorn, but I can't help it, I need some content. This one is still in progression. I'm looking for a chorus and as you can see, some lines are slopy, mostly the ones with "unreal" and the one finishing by shit.



Sinking deeper and deeper into darkness
Flirting with madness
Desperatly waiting for something better
Waiting fo the unreal forever
Life can't be just so empty
It must mean more than eternal agony
Who chose for my destiny?
Who couldn't have used of empathy?
Do I realy deserve it?
Am I reduced to an ammount of shit?
Purpose of living is to find the Answer
But it'll never be useful after
Contempling death in horror
The earlier the better
Before worries invade my head,
Before tears wet my bed
But stuck in a dilema,
The most complicated enigma
I would have a different perception
Life wouldn't give me the same deception
There again, trapped in the unreal
There would be nothing I could feel
Behind the mirror, everything's at the opposite
One more would show both sides at the infinite
Breaking the mystery long time sealed
The secret of life would be revealed.

i can sort of picture the first one being those ear candy sound arrangements that doesnt follow the typical song structure, wish i had some examples on hand theres hundreds out there. the second one sounds like it would be screamed with lots of heavy distortion guitars and pile driving double bass on every third rhyme. just my interpretation, hey its better than silence right? man it would suck to hear this on the radio someday and know someone stole it from you, you should mail these to yourself in a sealed envelope or get them copywritten before you go on here. then again, that could just be my own extreme paranoia kicking in



"im not paranoid!!! did someone tell you im paranoid? are you trying to get me to admit something?"

Yes, this is much better than silence if you're not being sarcastic.

okay thats fair enough