here's my latest.


where do you think you're heading today
don't write when you find your destination
you won't have time to contemplate
about all the mistakes you're gonna make

you can try to leave everything behind
but new thoughts will unfold in your mind
now I don't think you're one of a kind
you're just a saturated pig with a mind

no gold glazed magic card
no deep green pockets
if you take your chances
you better raise your stakes
'cause you don't got what it takes
so take your chance on this ride
it will only last for a while
before you're gonna twist

turn your self down, twist your self around
twist until you snap in the middle
turn your self down, turn your self around

fight these needles with poison
sting your self, poison them
this injection keeps you clear
clear from the pointless needles

then you'll come along and say
don't bow your head, don't show it
don't turn around, don't turn around
they won’t turn you down this day

don't let them in position
they’ll twist the lid off
don't let them come close
fear will clear the distance

how can you see how this is for me
when you won't ever see it like me
you'll soon be standing on your own
but I'll always be your unamed one

***please remember this is constructive criticism***

you can try to leave everything behind
but new thoughts will unfold in your mind
now I don't think you're one of a kind
you're just a saturated pig with a mind

to many "inds" ----then again it all depends on how its performed.

"no gold glazed magic card"
^^ to me this sounds like its referring to that card game (which im not to fond of), if so sure go with it however you want but if you dont want people being confused try somethin else for that line.

thanks dude!
appreciate.

Yeah I kinda see it now! =) didn't see it myself before now...

dude you have any leads? =) I'm stuck with that.

for the gold glazed part. its ment as credit cards.
maybe I should write...

"No gold charged plastic card"??

That sounds good I like that