My music is heavily influenced by where I grew up- Orange County, CA. It's real mellow and laid-back, almost as if I were still strumming my guitar on the HB pier singing to the passer's by. Just wanted to see what kinda feedback I'd get from anyone who is willing to seriously listen and would take some time to give me their 2 cents. Thanks in advance.

Relax, Unwind

clouds shifting, breeze drifting in
mind settled, thoughts welcomed in
time passes, so pardon me
it's shadow is where I'll be

relax, unwind (4xs)

my ambitions to be content
are hindered 'til she turns in
they said she's too warm for me
but her body is just the blanket i need

relax, unwind (4xs)

sit back, relax- it's over (3xs)
here's to this day's end
sit back, relax- it's over (3xs)
and unwind again...

u seem to have some talent but not know how to use it. the chorus doesnt have anything to it, very boring. i can almost picture the image that ur trying to create but it needs a bit more work